Divine_Dawn

Good

Correction: in this phrase "and can get that either by killing", the words "and can get that" should be " can be obtained".

Correction: in this phrase "did not thing it was", the word "thing" should be "think".

maybe, after the mission ends for all players, the ongoing fantasy world stops and then restarts till new mission emerges?

Correction: in this phrase "house with hand a pump which", the words "hand a pump" should be "a hand-pump".

Correction: in this phrase "He even bough in two chairs", the word "bough" should be "brought".

Correction: in this phrase "based on his tats to choose one", the word "tats" should be "Stats".

Author, first of all, thank you for creating such a wonderful Fanfiction novel! I really appreciate your hard work. I noticed that after the phrase "When your stamina points becomes," it might be clearer if you add a word like "low" or "less." Please feel free to check for comments like this, as I'll be happy to point out any areas where small corrections may be needed.

Writing Quality is good but still I hate when female characters which has shown interest in MC dying (Itsuka Kendo as well several work killed by father of Izuku Midoriya, Hiashi Midoriya in revenge for killing Izuku who is villian and is mentored under All for One), Ochako Uraraka after rescued by Hero-girl from Korea was forgotten which i think means dying after nuclear explosion across World.

One of the best mha fanfics. GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD