might as well make him an elder brother of Kakashi. Give Sesshomaru a string release Kekkei genkai so he'll be a puppet specialist at Sasori's level, that wolf would be his main puppet, Puppetry art is stolen by white wolf after killing Sasori's parents. Plus Kenjutsu specialist.

Does MC has Brawling Go MC's powers? I feel like that would be the most apt power set here. Also

lol the synopsis looks like the generic CN OP FFs synopsis.

I think Fujin failed to put himself in the equation. Why would Sasuke go to Orochimaru when the guy who defeated him is basically Naruto's neighbor. XD In Canon Hiruzen died, Kakashi got Curbstomped by Itachi & Kisame, that's why he thinks his best bet would be to go to Orochimaru.

it's not the MTL I had a problem with, but the shallow generic content.

I would but it already had some likes. So far it's a solid 3.2/5. The whole Overlord drama seems too inflated on this AU. I'd rate this higher but the Overlords OCs were just there to be curbstomped by MC and there's little to nothing else to look forward to.

I get that, but that's just too many lines of repeated scenarios side by side.

her POV is taking too much of the chapters. It would've a better impact if you showed her POV later on as a recap, and we know more the characters. You kinda spoiled everyone's personalities early on.

too redundant for me. The mind reading POV was executed poorly and ruined the pacing. You should've let things run normally then show Yina's POV after the conflict to avoid overlapping thoughts and dialogues.

my god all lines are inner monologues.

use single 'quote' for thoughts pls.

he doesn't even need to, it all needs the power of Family and meet Minato then boom! FTG Learned!

can't really liberate someone if they're all dead.

These Overlord OCs were so underwhelming. I'm just glad that the fight was over fast.

tftc

Escanor's Ultimate One is the closest I can imagine.

now he can use this to bake the best bread in Japan.

can't stay a virgin anymore with the puss flooding in after this.

no delay notice so far, but I'm not sure if the next chapter would be posted 24h after the latest or around this time like it "used" to.

Fujin afterwards like he didn't just do the schiznit.