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WattersAntone1yrCommentéNevermind I thought he meant reveal the future apocalypse I was wr ong
3. If you can't resolve the crises that you and I know about, try to cooperate with the government and reveal everything you know to them so that they can intervene to resolve it.- WattersAntone1yrCommenté
This one is stupid
3. If you can't resolve the crises that you and I know about, try to cooperate with the government and reveal everything you know to them so that they can intervene to resolve it. - WattersAntone1yrPosté
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You keep repeating the word sense. I’ve seen it 6 times in the last 5 paragraphs.
So, with a sense of determination, Kuma set off back to his makeshift shelter, eager to rest and recover from his battle with the bear. And as he walked, he couldn't help but feel a sense of wonder at the strange and mysterious world around him, and all the adventures that lay ahead. - WattersAntone1yrCommenté
Did he teleport to a clearing and why did he just stop in the middle of what he was doing to put the eyes in a clearing.
With a sense of excitement, Kuma carefully placed the bear's eyes in a small clearing in the forest. He then set up a simple trap around them, using some twine and a few branches to create a simple snare. - WattersAntone1yrCommenté
Broken bones in this environment without some magical healing or support from other people is a death sentence.
He tried to regain his strength but as he looked at himself, he couldn't help but feel a sense of dread. He was covered in dirt, blood, and sweat, and he had a lot of scratches and a few broken bones. He knew that he had pushed himself to the limit, and he wasn't sure if he would be able to make it back to camp on his own. - WattersAntone1yrCommenté
He let the creature go and got upset that the bear ate it and even attacked the bear and then said the bear stole his prey and tried to attack him.
Kuma felt fear and frustration, but most of it was his rage. He couldn't believe that this bear was trying to attack him, to kill him and claim what he trapped as his own. - WattersAntone1yrCommentéCh 10 Shiny
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How do you hammer out an imperfection with wood.
As if falling into a trance, Valyr's eyes darted about the spear's surface, finding any minute imperfections it had before carving it down with the knife he held. Then, at other times, he would place the knife down before picking up the forging hammer, hammering out the imperfections that couldn't be carved out with the knife. - WattersAntone1yrPosté
I don’t usually do reviews but I liked this story so I’m going to do one. First the translation could be better, there are multiple instances of wrong pronouns or different names. One thing that confuses me a little is that the story has a more western style like western names for everything but the city’s name is clearly not western. This isn’t too bad but a story should pick a style of name and stick with it unless there’res multiple cultures in the story and different names would fit the narrative. Second the world background is lacking, the reader doesn’t even know anything about the world other than he lives in a empire of knights with four duchies surrounding it even though Eli has lived there for three years with plenty of time to learn and multiple ways to relay it to us. These are things easily fixed going forward so I hope the novel continues because I do enjoy it and would recommend it.
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these names
"Who are you? Can you save my son? The woman asked as she approached the man. A smile played on his lips as he neared her. He embraced her and whispered in her ear. I am the eternal gardener. The God of Wild Plants, Moist Burrito. Take these weeds and boil them down. Have your son drink it, and all will be well." - WattersAntone1yrCommentéCh 212 Fenrir
- WattersAntone1yrCommentéCh 207 A New Way of Thinking
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That’s not what irony means
"Ironic, isn't it?" the young man asked. "Your opponent died from a hit to the head, while you also died from a hit to the head. You died the same way as the person you've killed." - WattersAntone1yrCommenté
He is different, he’s retarted
"However!" the man shouted, his voice sounding pleased. "You are not like a normal person. No, you are different." - WattersAntone1yrCommentéCh 192 The Great Skardian Army (Part 1)
- WattersAntone1yrCommentéCh 190 Faith Breaker (Part 1)