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so he's just gonna hold on to the body of his dead friend forever? Unless I missed it, it's still in his storage.
should this be Clearhearing?
*her comrades stupid autocorrect
*her companions
too bad it wasn't O'Doyle..
Valentina isn't there?
*Fortis Dud
These are flowing just as well as the first chapters. Keep it up. Keep in mind that Harem does not mean orgy, threesome, ect. Keep the scenes to what you are comfortable with, and they should keep flowing easily.
I think it was well done. The initial play was well written and thought out. Both individuals are new, so a super screw fest wouldn't have been realistic. I do hope that more indepth chapters happen, however, they are not necessary if they flow like these two did.