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I like that Winston's participation to the next arc "Baams Fall" I call it is not automatic compliant but rather needing to be convinced by Khun. Thanks for the chapter!
I just notice that the quality is ramping up the more we stick to Winston's POV. I like Winston's larger than life personality it really makes him standout to the already blinding variety of characters TOG have. Author I think you are the best when you are writing Winston Heath. Thank you for the chapter.
This chapter is an improvement over the previous one. We get to see more of Winston, understand his reasons for protecting Baam, and see that he's not passive—he has the courage to take action toward his own goals. Thus a good chapter overall.
Hoh's perspective might not be necessary to include here. In the original story, Hoh's POV was crucial because it contributed significantly to Baam's character development. However, in this narrative, we're primarily following Winston Heath's journey. While it's thoughtful to make the story accessible to new readers by referencing the original content, including the POV of a side character who doesn't influence the main character might not enhance the overall experience. It might be more beneficial to focus on the reactions to the previous team or to further explore the responses of the rankers, perhaps even through Endorsi or Baam's viewpoints, regarding Winston's actions in the exam. This way, the writing stays more closely connected to the main character's development.
i know this story might not of priority since it is an experiment you say, but I am really interested and invested in the plot already. mc is more relatable and as far as from the current released chapter, one I can empathize more. hope you give this story some love too.
not overpraising but rather redundancy of the paragraph. there were already multiple paragraph that is explaining his potential and keeps getting repeated.
In my opinion, the wisest political move Hiruzen could have made would have been to have Takeshi fostered by another influential family in Konoha, like the Hyuga. This would help establish common ground and satisfy Danzo while only slightly upsetting the Uchiha, who might still accept the arrangement since Takeshi wouldn’t be under Danzo’s control. If the fostering went well, it could lead to improved relations with another powerful clan, which would ultimately benefit the Uchiha as well. Given that the Uchiha already have a prodigy in Itachi—something Danzo would have been keenly aware of—Takeshi’s importance is too great to be monopolized by either Danzo or the Uchiha. Spreading influence more evenly across the village would be a more balanced approach. As Takeshi grows, he could potentially marry into the Hyuga clan or even establish his own clan, further spreading the unique traits of his kekkei genkai. Although fostering him into another family might seem cold, it’s a better option than the Uchiha hoarding all the geniuses. This would not only upset Danzo, who, despite Hiruzen's limited knowledge of Root, still holds significant influence in Konoha’s politics. Furthermore if Takeshi would be fostering in Uchiha it would mean two super geniuses being hoard by them, thus in turn would likely increase tensions in relations between the great clans within konoha, which tensions would only increase as Takeshi grows and shows his worth.
I like this new character personality you're trying, bleap; it's different from your usual unhinged MCs, but as you said, it's an experiment. The MC is mature and serious, which fits well into the setting that you are planning to establish according to your disclaimer where your holding off first from delving into the supernatural. It's too early to judge, but I think I'm hooked already.
For a moment I thought this story was Extinct.
I hope the pacing will slow down in future chapters. Take the time to establish your character within the world and let us, the readers, explore your interpretation of the cast. So far, the interactions feel artificial, as if the dialogues were written just to fill space. What made MHA popular was the various interesting characters that make up the anime. I hope you can give focus on this aspect before speeding up various arcs. I recommend using POV shifts to showcase your take on a characters personality and is much more simpler and interesting to read than relying on your MC as an unreliable narrator.