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whoops forgot to add, thank you for the Chapter love that you showed Hagrid as more as just some half/giant brute that some fanfics do

meh I love Hagrid and hes alot wiser than most people give him credit for.. but Ron is a twat, I understand Ron has his own issues and hes a teen, so emotions and and shit suck balls, but being jealous and being a twat a two different things and Ron is just a shitty twwatty friend, how he ends up with Hermione or how hes still friends with Harry at all after the shit he does makes no sense at all. This leads me to believe the Ron is the true MC of the HP books, serious his HALO pretty much allows him to get away with being a total prick and Harry and Hermione just go oh well thats all right.... hes perfect husband/ Best friend material.

can you change the name to the nimbus please, Firebolt wasn't even released till 1994, and its 1990 the year the Nimbus 2000 came out,

good novel so far, I just hope the author sticks to the side character, yeah hes a Black, so what technically bar Sirius all the other Blacks were side characters in the main story, so it does make sense to a point, my view is if he really is gonna be a side character, eg not putting his face smack bam in the middle of the main plot. if this happens Ill probably stop reading, but its been awhile since i have read an actual good HP fan fiction, so keep up the good work author, I look forward to see how you go. Ill consider being a patreon once i see how many updates your doing, I have a issue paying money then suddenly the author drops to 1 to 2 chapters a month,

gah I was hoping he would be smarter than this, why go for the stone, there is no point to it, be a side character, I hate when novels have good starts saying they will not be apart of the main story and they will keep away from it, then bam there straight into the thick of it. Though author, don't worry about taking it slow, if you speed things up to much it kind of ruins it, i don't mind chapters like this, just the stone comment and wanting to take it is a little on the pointless side.

I am just gonna say it... did you use a translation app that made it look like a toddler translated it, or was the original writer a idiot? i have read your other works, but this doesn't read like your translations at all. its like its purley Machine then put through AI. I was looking forward to another HP translation but either the novel you picked was written so basic, or your translation method has switched to Machine then AI. What ever it is, its making this novel a real pain in the ass to read

hogwarts does charge though? only muggle born get to study for free in a sense, but they have to pay it back later on, just like a student debt,

how to put it, it has potential, but I think another reviewer has pointed it out. You can't tell at times when someone is thinking or talking. the explanations are good, but also kind of feels like a lot of wank. you can easily tell this was AI done as it reads like a robot putting commands down. I like the concept, but it needs a proofer and something to go through and edit it so it flows better.

I really hope he gets the Hand under control, and not working with it, i mean completely get rid of it, was liking this novel don't need a talking hand

yeah I am not going to be the only one who thought she had to sleep with two guys