Marvel-ous Ninjutsu

Ignore the cool cover, the first 17 chapters are largely babyfic, then toddler fic once the exceedingly long prologue is over. Its well enough written, the paragraphs could be smaller to be more phone friendly, but it's honestly the long childhood that doesn't work for me. It feels like the story is stuck in mud with how slowly it progresses.

So I will use this to answer any questions people ask me about, like "Y NO HAREM?" Sorry, but I did state I was writing a story I would want to read. Most harem stories just don't make any sense and would never actually work if you think about it for more then a few minutes. I think I have only read one story out of 100+ that had a small harem that actually made sense and worked well for the story. I didn't think I could pull that off as a writer, so if I decide to make one, it won't be for the MC because I would have to actually make it believable for myself and I don't think my writing chops are that great. I will write reply's to this when I get other questions I feel need to be answered. Or you could even ask here and I might reply if it is something I feel people should know about.

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I really wanted to enjoy this story but it's not for me. First and foremost, let's cut to the chase: the writing quality is excellent. The comedy is spot-on, with jokes that hit their mark most of the time. What's impressive is that the humor doesn't take away from the seriousness of the story, and vice versa. The main character is intriguing and boasts a well-developed personality, adding depth to the narrative. Now comes the issues with the story 1) "The story's pace leans towards the slower side. (personally, it didn't bother me too much.) Nevertheless the first 30 chapters, the narrative is told from a baby's or child's perspective. To the extent that you could almost label the first half of the story as a slice-of-life tale. While this deliberate focus on early life experiences might appeal to some readers, it did contribute to a slower progression in the overall plot, which, for me, was acceptable but may be a point of consideration for others. 2) The portrayal of other characters' personalities is a notable issue. The author seems to have difficulty maintaining consistency in how characters behave. This inconsistency is especially noticeable with characters like Hank Pym, The Ancient One, and Nick Fury, although it's a recurring problem throughout the narrative. Some character interactions defy logic, while others seem to undergo drastic shifts in their traits simply to fit the storyline. This inconsistency in character portrayal made it challenging for me to fully connect with the story, as it often felt like the characters were not staying true to themselves. 3) Logistical errors (This is the one that really bothered me). The story is riddled with unrealistic and absurd logic. Most of the time, the characters' plans, theories, and actions are poorly explained and clearly not well thought out, which made it hard for me to fully immerse myself in the story. It felt like there were gaps in the storytelling that left me questioning the characters' decisions and the overall plot.

this story has a great start everything starting from backstory and beginning page where many writers just isekai by hitting a truck and you are reincarnated into new world meaning mostly people don't take effort where the guy or girl came from its just getting on with the story. I like the sweet family he is growing with little comedy that you added in Theo took a micky out his father saying "quick shot". It is a wholesome family. And his father being car mechanic and mom being a high end lawyer their is definitely a back story their i would like to know about it. I am also a lover of retro cars 1970 Dodge challenger is my favorite. Natasha romanoff is ear tto me I am just putting out here. Loving your story please don't leave in between.Toodles...😍

Harem or Non-Harem which one is it author-sama. Honestly I don't even care as both works for me but it never hurts to know.

everything was going well till chapter 36 when he said about making clones of himself even when he has multi shadow clone jutsu and those clone already have different personality from mc coz they are characters from naruto but no author still wants mc to have more clones of mc . I think that would mess up the story more and frankly I'm not a fan of the idea. so I'll drop it here. anyway the writing quality is good and story development is good as well, so you can give it a go.( if you are OK with the clone idea.)

The story, writing, and plot is great. The prologue is the issue, it’s too long. 20ish chapters of a baby and he tells people he’s reincarnated. Is too much for me to keep my interest for a story where everyone knows he’s reincarnated. Thats like one of the rules of isekai, not to tell people you reincarnated

This is a great story so far (as of ch11) and has massive potential. The writing quality is excellent, and there are little to no things that could put people off; the mc is not op, but through training he can be strong, good character interactions, not an edgelord, nor is he stupid. There is a lot of room for growth.

One of the most unique start. This is so good. And I hope sam and lily can go to him. One of the most unique start. This is so good. And I hope sam and lily can go to him.One of the most unique start. This is so good. And I hope sam and lily can go to him.

Its verrrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyy slllllooooooooow pace, It took 20 chapters for prologue and its been 30 chapters and the mc is still in baby phase. Wow. Even if the story is like diamond readers like me loose interest in it if it drags on way to much. At first there was anticipation then slowly i started loosing interest in what will happen next then i had to drop it completely. I guess it might interest few people but this fanfic is not for me.

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I am truly loving this story! It keeps me interested and entertained. It even made me emotional quite a few times. I highly recommend reading this Fanfic. The only thing I could wish for is daily updates, but I understand not all Authors are capable of updating daily. Please keep working hard on your story and I’ll keep supporting you! Thank you!

Great and unique story can't recommend it more [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend].

pretty good so far, excited to see where this goes

I really like what was written so far, please keep up the good work. don't drop

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it’s just not for me, there’s not much power building more plot building, the mc being a kid lasts practically the whole story .

The worldbuilding part takes time i get that but we need more chapters if its going to take long other than that its been magnificent a good marvel fanfic without a harem meens two things either its going to have a really good romance or this fanfic going to skip the romance part both of which i am okay with and from the writing style it shows this is going to be one of the best marvel novels out there. I suggest the writer shouldnt mind bad comments (if theres any) in the future and continue to write. Best of luck !!!!

I absolutely love it, even though most people don't like the start i think it was needed and frankly well thought and it shows the characters without rushing them like most fanfics do. The only thing that scares me is the tragedy tag, if any family member dies i might lose it