I Reincarnated as I have got One Permanent Ability per Day

Hey there, Tobi here. This fanfic is ok in my opinion but the story is bland, some of it's plot is a little bit forced. Now I only read till chapter 5, maybe in the later chapters it will get better but I'm gonna review on the previous chapters that I read (Chapter 1-5) In Chapter 1 till 5, he didn't mention anything about his previous life situation so it makes me wonder what's going on, what's his goal. It got the "entertainment barely good so I'm gonna steal works from my former world to get rich" cliché situation, not that I hate it but it's very cliché. The golden finger he got is very OP (1 day 1 ability) and I was hoping that the author will make a comedy scene since reading about 'OP guys but with a bland interactions' will be boring. The interactions MC has with other people is ok... but I was hoping for more. Maybe that will change when I read the later chapters. That's just my opinion. It's similar to the other story called 'My Life as Tadano' by Charlotte. That story is good, maybe this was inspired by that, idk. Tobi is done, Tobi never wrote such a long review. Tobi is tired. But Tobi will give this one a like since there's Tobi in it (not the character but the clothing)

-The writing needs improvement -The grammar is fine -Too fast paced -The mc accepts too fast of his current situation,making him have a personality of an emotionless person Tips: Change your style of writing Something like this Girl: Boy: If you don't like that way of writing do it like this The boy spoke to the girl "Words Words Words"(Boy) "Words Words Words"(Girl) The reason for the parenthesis Is to indicate who is speaking but after those first two sentences you can remove the parenthesis something like this Words Words Words"(Boy) "Words Words Words"(Girl) "Words Words Words" "Words Words Words" By improving the parts i mentioned Your story will improve atleast a bit And lastly put your heart into making the novel!

Writing Quality: 3 stars, I saw way worse but with the awkward use of the tenses and the weird sentences you just can't immerse yourself in this Stability of updates: dunno with the last sh*tty WN update that doesn't let you see when was a chapter last updated so I put 4 stars Story development: it's wish fulfillment so -1 star, there are way to much clichés -1 star, this is harem there is so much forced bs and the plot goes at the speed of light and the mc meets only anime characters so -2 star, that makes it 1 star Character Design: I saw really bad mcs on this website but this.... this one is worse: -1 star for the nerf-mc (srsly what's the point of giving him the EMS and instant mastery if he doesn't even use it in dire situations) -1 star for the hypocrite mc, -1 star for the idiot mc, -1 star for the fùcking one dimensional females and retarded males, so that makes it 1 star World Background: -4 star just for the fact that this is a crossover world with DxD in it (srsly what's the point of having DxD, this is just overused and here it's badly executed, can't a single author understand that DxD isn't interesting anymore with the trillion of fics on it ? couldn't he have used Tokyo Ghoul for example ?) and the fact that the author thinks everyone already knows and can immediatly identify the story from where a character is, so he doesn't explain anything at all, he just tells you a character's name and what his background is in this Crossover fic, no other information about the plot at all. Srsly I would put 0 star for it if I could because of my unconditionnal hate of harems, retarded mcs, badly executed crossover fics (srsly, tell me how you plan to make Assassination Classroom and DxD work in the same world ? with even more forced plot and bs ?) reading this is just a waste of time, even Chinese Novels are better than that, in the end I read until the last chapter as of now (ch.12) because I thought the author would try to make the story better with how much bs and forced plot the readers pointed but NO, nothing changed and it even got worse with DxD's introduction. TL;DR: no immersion at all, hypocrite and idiot mc, forced plot bigger than your mom's arse, clichés and nerfs everywhere for no reason, worst worlds mashup ever and worst author ever, don't waste your time reading this 'novel', this is one of if not THE worst wish fulfillment ff I have ever read **: if the author ever gets the Idea to delete this comment, I'll just repost this with a deleted count here: 0

Good job with this novel ^_^ . I hope you didn't drop this novel and the other(A Strange Slow Life With System') 👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪👍💪

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For my Review I should say that the mac personality here is everchanging because there is one time he pathetic wimp then in another chapter he release strong bloodlust despite killing few And the mc is so op in the start but still act like a wimp and his power sometime doesnt work despite him mastering it cause of intant mastery So my evaluation of the mc is he is pathetically Nerfed Then the story jump places from time to time like what the f*ck can u atlleast show something interesting from time time rather than boring and if you gonna write filler at least add some element to it like comedy , drama or exciting fight or my favorite the badass moment And for the world development/bckground at least think about what you add before writing it andthink of the plot(if you have one) and how it can affect it not just write it for the sudden inspiration because it will jumble it making it hard to write more Character development I think there isnt because it still have few chapter and I hope to see more changes especially mc personality And can unnerf MC please

Hello, hello. Don't take my advice too seriously or personally, I'm an anyomus internet dweller currently lurking on your fics because I like your ideas, or at least like the thought you put into your writing. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings or upset you. Anyways... Alrightly, dont use script style. Script is for movies and plays, not for writing. What I mean by this is don't do this. Reviewer: "Author-san, please stop using script!" Author: "Nani! How dare you criticize the great me!" This reads a little better. "Author-san, please stop using script!" The reviewer squeaked out, wary of the authors wrath. "Nani!" The author dramaticly threw their hands into the air. "How dare you criticize the great me!" No names before dialogue , it takes people out of the story and a lot of people wont read a fic if it's in script style. If you cant tell who is speaking from the dialogue without a name in front of it, then it should probably be re-written. Grammer is not great but it's passable for this site. I'll say what I say to a lot of people. Use Grammarly. It will improve your grammar a lot and make reading your work more enjoyable. It's also free! (I can see lot's of improvement as of ch12 so keep it up!) Update stability is good for your chapter length, so no complaints. Story development feels a little too fast/forced. But that's fine, it's better then dragging things out. Your character isn't consistent, he's a wimp, but suddenly he's a murder hobo that releases bloodlust and kills people. I think you were trying to show charater development or growth of some kind but missed the mark. I might be off the mark, but it feels like you have a plan for the story and are pushing it forward based on that plan. It makes it a little forced if things dont happen 'naturally' to a certain extent. Keep at it though, plans are only for 'rough stuff', dialogue should be free flowing so as to come off as naturally as possible, Again, that might be completely off the mark. Disreguard this in that case. World background is acceptable, no complaints. Anyways part two... I like the way you do other characters. They seem to follow their own pattern of speech and aren't just using laugange in the same way your Mc does. They also seem consistent, or at least not inconsistent. I also like the Pov switches. The perspectives are done well, it adds a lot to a story. I like the cross-over thing. Your 'gathering power' story-line options are limited since power is just gifted to mc daily. On the other side, I dont enjoy the butchered slang. This is getting too long so I wont get into it, but butchered english + english slang doesn't read well. 'Ripped' was the slang that annoyed me the most. Though 'my muscles getting more ripped' did crack me up. 'I'm getting ripped' 'that guy is ripped' 'jessica is into big dudes so I'm going to get ripped' is generally how that piece of slang is used. There's simmular incorrect uses of words throughout the fic. It's fine as people(me) can tell what you mean, and what your thoughts/intentions were when you write stuff. But definitely something to work on. Anyway... I hope to see more from you, keep writing and improving, watch youtube vid's on writing, and write as much as possible. Again, I like what you're making, keep it up!

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[Translated into the Portuguese to English translator.] I don't even know why I read this story, it simply boiled down to the author writing a lot of forced material and a basic plot of 0. It's nothing more than a story where the protagonist gains new powers in each chapter, ultimately being a empty story.

This novel is the best please give him some powers from dragon ball world and bleach and hunterxhunter world

the writing is ****ed up bro, everything else is good Maybe you could yse diffetent words or stuff not that i am great myself but please ☺ .

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i've just binged it and its a really nice book, the grammar can be spotty but its readable, also he's done an ok job with crossovers, overall its a decent book with some room for improvement, Though I will say that its become very good book because of the update rate(hence the 5 star). overall good, but can be improved.

Noice but i don't really like you add I Want to Eat Your Pancreas. because sakura ....hmmm...what do i say.....oh i don't really like the character yup that its.

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I am sorry for this Author, the "spaw" is for zhanye, some brazilians didn't watch the full video. I know my apology is not much, just ignore or report the comment that are disturbing you. I didn't read your novel but I want you to have a great future.

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interesing. Author, you will make the protagonist inject himself with the same virus that they put on "koro -sensei", since he knows they still have the virus. ********************************************************************************************************************************************************