A Sword Demon In Naruto

It is good. I just think that if you give a character two options one of them being clearly looking better than the other, I don't think they would choose a demi demon over a demon. You might want to show their thought process behind it

I'm not a fan of Naruto so, here's my review of your writing. Most paragraphs are quite long, try to shorten them for better reading by readers. And even the sentences can actually be shortened into two or three. My tips, try to re-read and recite the paragraphs or dialogues, usually, we can find if they sound weird. One more thing, if you have one or two authors that you enjoy their books, try to analyze how they write each of their paragraphs and dialogues, and how they outline the chapters. Writing is hard without more practice. Everyone begins from somewhere so, all the best!