Isn't it better?

"I don't know where he's mind lives when we discuss things. " Sid commented as soon as Mr. Loy left the counter. 

"I know right. "Jake agreed as he extended his cup towards the machine. 

Mr. Loy walked straight to Sam's desk along with his coffee mug only to find her busy in the computer. Her temples frowned as she leaned forward to the monitor screen. Mon was sitting on the next table checking on some files. 

Mr.Loy hasistated to ask them anything when he saw they were busy but then he was also kind of interested. So he asked them in a murmur"What does that new guy have to do with Benny's case? "

"Which guy, Mr. Loy? " Sam asked, her eyes still fixed on the monitor screen as scrolls down the information on it. 

"The new one. I heard you found another friend of theirs? " Mr. Loy said. 

"He is a common friend of both the victims and was not seen for a month so we are collecting information about him. " Unexpectedly, Mon replied this time.