Review Detail of DevSticks in The Elden Lord /ASOIAF

I have no idea why there aren’t more bad reviews. 1. The main character is wildly inconsistent with his power usage and only remembers to use them when they are needed for the plot and continently forget them as soon as a plot point needs to be introduced. 2. The pacing is all over the place and new characters are mentioned and forgotten the next paragraph making the attempt building of seemingly meaningful character connections and the general flow of character interactions/Dialogue is cancer to read. 3. The story is for the most part narrated to you and is more of a ’tell’ rather than ‘show’ method of storytelling making it a story that is hard to feel exited about or feel any connection to the main character. Overall the concept seems like it would be a very interesting story/setting but the execution form what I have read is poor. I do hop the author takes this in to account for any further FF’s as these are not mistakes in writing you should ignore if you hope to get better. No hate author just pointing some things out I hope you have a good day futher and keep improving your writing.