Dude give the character a bit more personality. Also please space out the sentences. Also I seen this story before I am gonna assume you are the author or asked permission but please flesh out the sentences and dialogue. Children from other pantheons is good but build up the history and background of these characters based on a version of said myth this story seems like a rushed copy and paste and could be better so please do so
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me gustaYou have amazing potential my dude keep writing and adapting as a fellow author that is all I can say.
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