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AuthorEgo
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Really nice job, the writing is really easy to read and imagine. The only reason it’s not five stars is because I thought the world and character were too simple/cliche. The cripple bag holder with family in the hospital seems bland, overdone, and didn’t need 5+ chapters to get started. Same thing for the powersystem, I wish you had shown how it worked in the first couple chapters instead of simply telling us what was happening around the world. Only giving a critique because it was truly great writing, and I think this has really good potential. My only wish is for you give the backstory/world building more originality and showing through dialogue or action rather than telling through narration.

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Thank you for the feedback, and we'll continue to improve 🙏👍