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2024-08-30 02:46

Let me give you some 2 critical advice if you take my advice seriously you will rework the whole novel if not you're gonna continue with what you're doing. Advice 1: While it's encouraging to see you put in a lot of effort with the long chapters you are giving us you also need to understand that some of your readers have a short attention span and when i saw how long the chapter was I was genuinely impressed but also intimidated I didn't want to go through all that so make it a bit shorter. Advice 2: While long and big chapters are good for self-esteem and pride for authors it also works against you if you shorten the chapters to 2k-3k words you would have more than 30+ chapters which in itself works to attract more readers to your book.

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