Review Detail of Celleborn in Naruto: System of Hellish Exercises
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This story is hard for me to rate. The story is really good, is shocking how few Rock Lee fics there is out there. I have 2 problems with it however, and just one can really be fix, first, there are barely any dialog, is more narration than anything, saying that the mc talk with Naruto and they became friends is not a good enough substitute for a few lines of dialog with they bonding (This review is being posted while there is just 13 chapters, and hopefully after Lee gets a team this will not be a problem). The second thing that I don't like is the writing style of the author, this is personal taste and there isn't anything to be done about. Is hard to explain, but it's not those hush fics where the author seem to want to make the most things happen in the least amount of words, nor it is super slow, the pacing is good. I would recommend to read the first few chapters and judge if the writing is for you.
Naruto: System of Hellish Exercises
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I also don't like it when authors will have like 1 or two lines like "The main character talked to some other characters, they are now friends" since it makes it hard to connect with the characters other than the mc that were introduced. Like if you introduce a character as a friend make them seem like a friend, give them character, ambition, thoughts, and feelings. Doing that will make the reader feel the importance of them. For example, if you kill of a character without giving them character, ambition, thoughts, and feelings the readers won't feel sad that the character is now gone. If you don't let a character talk and actually have the main character interact with other characters they can't have character, ambition, thoughts, and feelings.