The author clearly thought out the world very well. Writing Quality: You can see enough errors in the writing quality that it could do with a few run it through here once or twice. Reread your chapter and it will be much easier to read. https://writer.com/grammar-checker/ I also recommend just sit on something occasionally and give us more detail as to what they are seeing/tasting/smelling/etc. Story: Going well it has cute premise so keep it up! Character Design: Solid, but have to wait to get more feel for them
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