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A contradictory read if I have seen any. This is probably one of the good examples of "You can't please everyone". And I'm certainly far from being pleased. But anyways, I'm by no means representative of anyone but myself and my own personal views/opinions. Details:_________________________________ Writing Quality(4.5/5): Tbh one of the better written ones on the platform. There isn't much I can fault on, that won't be subjective and full of my personal biases. Hence I don't think I can add much to this endeavour. ________________________________________ Story Development (2/5): Maybe it was wrong of me to review it with only a few chapters released(Somewhere around 20). But as of this moment the story is totally all over the place. Some actions of characters seems to hold no logical reasons whatsoever. There's a self imposed need of showing mystery that in my opinion is not helping the case of this particular piece. The main character is nowhere an underrated one, most if not all of the people are aware of the Monkey King's story. Adding that name and him as a protagonist in this fic I thought there need not be too much mystery involved. People who loved him came here to see his pure unadulterated chaos and mischief. But it's preference and in no way represents the entirety of the reader base. ________________________________________ Character Design(2/5): Character design is bad in my opinion. But before some eager youngun keyboard warrior well versed in the dao of all writing decides to school me for my heresy, I appeal you to indulge in my reasoning. As previously stated the MC is a well established character. His is a story of many things but I presumptuously assume that the most impact was his aspect of redemption. It was after that the character became likable to me(to may I'd assume but I could be wrong). So ripping him off of his universe at the end of his saga and then forcing him to degrade to a maniac level just because you want your own character development saga is not really appealing to me. I'm not a huge fan of nerfs, but this instance I could get over that, what bothers me tho, is that his character has been reduced to a maniac ruthless killer with no remorse, an unrepentant, petty bundle of confusion which makes his current character arguably worse than the one he had at the very beginning of his journey. So I do not think the author did justice to the Monkey King's character. Don't get me wrong, it can be a good character development story and that is great. Just imo, it was an unnecessary and forced character development that required you to degrade a well-rounded good character. Then there are other characters. I don't know about others as the opinions of the 5 star reviews do clash with mine but when it comes to certain characters's from X-Men's side, they seemed more like 1 dimensional characters to me. Whereas there seems to be more effort put in their counterparts. So there's this glaring undertone of plot being forced, whereas a subtler tone would've been more useful for the fic is what I believe. But once again, all of these are just personal opinions. ________________________________________________________________________________ Updating Stability(5/5): I'm still conflicted about the earlier ratings on SD & CD. And I'd not like to take the ratings down even more demotivating the author as I do feel the author has a talent for writing, and my own concerns are full of biases. So, full score here. ________________________________________ World Background(3/5): It's just been only so so chapters. Even though my review is fully filtered through my own lenses I still hope it serves some purpose to any potential readers hence I can't in good conscience judge the world building with only this much. So a decent 3/5.Overall: I'm at an impasse on whether to recommend it or not. And I have explained my reasoning for that already. With an unsure tone I'd urge every reader to give it a try for the first 5 chapters at least. If it does not look good to you then it doesn't improve much in the next 20 or so chapters. But if it does then good for you, coz I have a hunch that this one will be a long one if it is not dropped.
Monkey King in Marvel
_MYSTERY
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thank you for the detailed review. It helps me a lot in improving my work when someone takes the time to give some constructive criticism. I can't say much for the story development being so horrible, except for the fact that I'm a new writer and I'm not very experienced, but I'll try take the time to improve it. As for the character design, I have been getting complaints about how my characters are too 1 dimensional, that is a fault on my part for not putting much effort into side characters other than Lorna. However, on the nerfed sun wukong point, I understand how it might be frustrating to witness a great character be "reduced" to such a level. But in my defence, this sun wukong wasn't at the end of his journey. this wasn't a sun wukong who had fully learnt humility and selflessness. I know that isn't an excuse for the way I made him which is why I'll say this, although I shouldn't be, there is a deeper reason for his emotions and actions, such as the killing and what not. its a deeper reason that'll be explained later in the story. nevertheless, I still understand the points people make about him and I see how it can make him a bad MC. it was probably a fault of mine to make him like this. Anyway, thank you for the detailed review. I'll try my best to improve on the points that im lacking in. thank you.
_VIIX_:And I forgot to mention it in the review but good luck to the author in the writing journey. I do apologize for not having the taste to enjoy your work of labour as you intended.
Mu guy (or girl, coz I honestly don't know, your name is mystery), I'll be the first one to admit that your quality of writing and your experience do not match up. Coz this is too great of writing for someone still in the early stages. Good job. The characters being 1d problem, that's kind of intermediate level problem actually. But anyways, the thing is this is a problem with writing about characters who are already pre-established. A reader would always initially assume that the characters being introduced in the beginning will remain relevant all throughout the story(it might be wrong assumption but it's a general assumption). Hence they will have the utmost focus. In case of original fictions even if those characters come off as 1d, an author has a little bit of leeway as nobody has any idea what the actual character is, and the author can later just add more to the character. But in case of fanfictions, the side characters more often than not already have their background and character decided(at least people do have ideas and opinions about them), they are well established. Everyone has their own favourite character who they have studied. Hence, when your portrayal doesn't match their view, it becomes easier to nitpick. Now, realistically it is very difficult to portray all side characters in their glory while focusing your own story. From my observations, I see many good authors avoid this simply by not really adding much of the side characters. They introduce very few(around 2-3) main ones in the beginning and establish them thoroughly, who will be forefront of the interactions of the plot. After that the secondary ones come one by one, thus reducing their load to write an exact portrayal of an entire group at a time. It's just a suggestion and hopefully it does provide some help. ________________________________________ That said I guess I have made a wrong judgement in my haste. If you do have a plot around the idea of his degraded personality then that is great. I still don't like it and my argument would be, that degraded personality hardly makes him the Monkey King (Which is the title in the first place). But that's my subjective preference coming through. So, I'd say this again, this will be a good story for the readers that are looking for "Character Development". On last note, I don't really mind the power Nerf in this case, in fact it was essential, otherwise a powerful maniac would screw the plot six ways to sundays.
_MYSTERY:thank you for the detailed review. It helps me a lot in improving my work when someone takes the time to give some constructive criticism. I can't say much for the story development being so horrible, except for the fact that I'm a new writer and I'm not very experienced, but I'll try take the time to improve it. As for the character design, I have been getting complaints about how my characters are too 1 dimensional, that is a fault on my part for not putting much effort into side characters other than Lorna. However, on the nerfed sun wukong point, I understand how it might be frustrating to witness a great character be "reduced" to such a level. But in my defence, this sun wukong wasn't at the end of his journey. this wasn't a sun wukong who had fully learnt humility and selflessness. I know that isn't an excuse for the way I made him which is why I'll say this, although I shouldn't be, there is a deeper reason for his emotions and actions, such as the killing and what not. its a deeper reason that'll be explained later in the story. nevertheless, I still understand the points people make about him and I see how it can make him a bad MC. it was probably a fault of mine to make him like this. Anyway, thank you for the detailed review. I'll try my best to improve on the points that im lacking in. thank you.
thank you for the kind words. I wasn't sure if my writing quality was up to point so I thank you for the compliment and i will take your advice about the side characters. as for the Monkey King problem, I'm sorry its not up to standard, I may have made a mistake in the way I introduced him. I can always fix him throughout the story but the first impression and the first few chapters are what really set the mc, and if people don't like him at the start, they'll always have a certain fixed opinion of him that's really hard to shake. I'll try do better throughout the story. Thank you for the comments
_VIIX_:Mu guy (or girl, coz I honestly don't know, your name is mystery), I'll be the first one to admit that your quality of writing and your experience do not match up. Coz this is too great of writing for someone still in the early stages. Good job. The characters being 1d problem, that's kind of intermediate level problem actually. But anyways, the thing is this is a problem with writing about characters who are already pre-established. A reader would always initially assume that the characters being introduced in the beginning will remain relevant all throughout the story(it might be wrong assumption but it's a general assumption). Hence they will have the utmost focus. In case of original fictions even if those characters come off as 1d, an author has a little bit of leeway as nobody has any idea what the actual character is, and the author can later just add more to the character. But in case of fanfictions, the side characters more often than not already have their background and character decided(at least people do have ideas and opinions about them), they are well established. Everyone has their own favourite character who they have studied. Hence, when your portrayal doesn't match their view, it becomes easier to nitpick. Now, realistically it is very difficult to portray all side characters in their glory while focusing your own story. From my observations, I see many good authors avoid this simply by not really adding much of the side characters. They introduce very few(around 2-3) main ones in the beginning and establish them thoroughly, who will be forefront of the interactions of the plot. After that the secondary ones come one by one, thus reducing their load to write an exact portrayal of an entire group at a time. It's just a suggestion and hopefully it does provide some help. ________________________________________ That said I guess I have made a wrong judgement in my haste. If you do have a plot around the idea of his degraded personality then that is great. I still don't like it and my argument would be, that degraded personality hardly makes him the Monkey King (Which is the title in the first place). But that's my subjective preference coming through. So, I'd say this again, this will be a good story for the readers that are looking for "Character Development". On last note, I don't really mind the power Nerf in this case, in fact it was essential, otherwise a powerful maniac would screw the plot six ways to sundays.