Not worthy reading.
Interactions and plot is forced.
No continuity.
Read 12 chaps. Still no improvement.
From 1st chap the author is giving different details.
Hello, author here. I just wanted to ask for a more detailed review. No disrespect to you, but I would like to know the flaws of my fan fic so that it maybe more enjoyable to read. If you have time, please reply. Thank you.