There are no obvious or major issues But that doesn’t mean there aren’t 1. The pacing is stupid fast and you don’t describe what is happening so it’s hard to get an Indea to what is going on (I don’t think you even described the mc) 2. Some of the things done or said in this story have not been thought through like the mc instantly picking Cote even though the world has nothing to offer beyond time These are the only real issues and both can be fixed by spending time rereading or just thinking about the chapter before you post it
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