I would say good start, but I would work on the variety of beginning of each sentence you written since I noticed it's either Infinity or *He* or The a long the way I noticed. I think its an interesting story and I can tell you really wanna tell this tale. I wish you luck on your endeavors to make this what you want. Goodluck to you!
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