Author seems to have forgotten about soul rings and how important it is to have a soul ring in soul land. MC is a depressed kid that often falls into crippling depression. (it makes me fall into depression tho) forced romance out of no where, illogical how aphrodisiac was in the kitchen and many other plot holes. I read too many times how the MC will find a way to grow strong but he spent months with a girl while planning nothing. Idk what's going on with this story but author you either need to stick 3rd pov or 1st pov, I can't read 3 paragraph with multiple povs and not feeling like burning a hole through my brain. I would recommend reading the novel thoroughly and then rewrite it. you need to know that the caravan conversation, forced romance and pregnancy and a protagonist who only thinks about being strong but does nothing other than spending time with a girl will lower your own fanfics worth. If you instead made him hard working hunter with amazing senses and a sense of responsibility it would have been completely different, he could have soul rings, have fighting experience and what not. I say all this because the idea of an archer is awesome when no one does it. you already differentiated from other but other plots ruined a lot of the story
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me gustaZaztra_Vandesh:Soul ring, depend on what timeline you land on, are becoming less and less important as the world progress on.
Zaztra_Vandesh:Soul ring, depend on what timeline you land on, are becoming less and less important as the world progress on.
the soul rings only dosnt matter in the 4 ddl. because at the end of the 3 its created the way to have a perfect ring whit out kill a spirit beast. and the rigns that god gives are only to his succesor so... the rings matter in ddl because their give a power up to the martial spirit. like tang san in the first that snake give more resistance to a useles spirit (remember that the plant spirit dosnt have a real power till he became the "blue emperor glass") and after the snake give him resistance the spider give to the martial spirit a venom.
Zaztra_Vandesh:Soul ring, depend on what timeline you land on, are becoming less and less important as the world progress on.