Review Detail of Cameron_Henderson_0639 in Young Justice: Vampire
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honestly the author writes the description of the scenes amazingly but it feels like the author is just going on a line and he keeps jumping across it if that makes sense its like he'll write a great description of one scene and the next is just skipped like he'll get Descriptive with the layout of the scene but when it comes to character development he just rushes it I mean after chapter one he skips the mc going out and getting batmans attention and his more unique powers that he already knows about but just came out of know where also the fact that somehow he knows how to defuse a bomb with no explanation he make the world an au but despite having meta knowledge the mc doesn't react even a little bit to it so I'm short the author is great at designing the in the moment scene but not the character development.
Young Justice: Vampire
Master_Atlest
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what I was trying to mean is that you don't go in depth on the characters like how the mc discovers his powers which is an important part of development and helps connect to him since your figuring it out with him but you just have it pop up out of nowhere but the mc already knows about it which is confusing since we didn't experience the discovery also you near immediately skipped over batman discovering him and you commented on how he was doing it on purpose which indicates the mc has a plan but you don't explain it. you say the mc has memory loss but he has meta knowledge but doesn't react at all to the fact that there were new characters that weren't in the original show and you just write him disarming bombs but don't explain how he knows that
Master_Atlest:someone said i was adding too much description so i adjusted now i should add more?
he doesnt know which universe he is in; why should he be surprised? he doesnt know if the knowledge in his head is accurate enough, i state that clearly, every single ability he has discovered was covered and how he discovered them was also covered; they were not just randomly introduced, and i bet you are talking how "blood" that was when he was in battle at the point where the green lantern created a shield to block his attack, it even states the mc was afraid but the primal part of him took over and attacked, clearly he wasnt the one who used it randomly, it is part of his vampire package that he never knew about that was also discovered along side the readers. must i spoon feed you everything?
Cameron_Henderson_0639:what I was trying to mean is that you don't go in depth on the characters like how the mc discovers his powers which is an important part of development and helps connect to him since your figuring it out with him but you just have it pop up out of nowhere but the mc already knows about it which is confusing since we didn't experience the discovery also you near immediately skipped over batman discovering him and you commented on how he was doing it on purpose which indicates the mc has a plan but you don't explain it. you say the mc has memory loss but he has meta knowledge but doesn't react at all to the fact that there were new characters that weren't in the original show and you just write him disarming bombs but don't explain how he knows that