Review Detail of Ruemari_Cordan in Time For Vengeance

First of all, I get the idea of the book. The blurb of the story will interest you from reading it, but there's something lacking in your story. It's lacking of description that will make the readers get hook in the story though little improving will do. Second, I noticed that you always put the dialogue tag before the dialogue though it isn't bad to use it, but using it every conversation will disrupts some readers (or maybe just me). You can just put it at the end of dialogue and be careful with the punctuation because it'll affect the flow of story if not use in right way. Lastly, I don't think if it's right for me to say this since I'm not good on it, but you should work on your grammar. You don't need to be perfect on it, just a little editing and it might work on your story. Nevertheless, I understand that the story might not interest everyone at first but no one knows how the story goes on and it might become a good and interesting novel in the future as the story continues. P.S. I'm sorry if I offended you in some ways, but I want to give you an honest feedback so you can improve for the next chapter. Keep up the good work 👍