Review Detail of Bob_Uchiha_XD in hollywood system: art
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The spelling has some errors, but the most obvious thing is that there are sudden changes in setting and the paragraphs are not separated so as not to get confused when reading the chapter. You could use: ---- or *** to separate paragraphs that have different scenarios.
hollywood system: art
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Example: The protagonist is in his office signing some documents, where he is interrupted by the secretary for some random reason. ************ The protagonist is inside the car, returning to his house, there he has a conversation with his father. ***************** At the protagonist's house, he and his father plan new things.
rollo1019to: the conversations are with"- - " >>continuation of the conversation. -. - thought.