Review Detail of Vishisht_Magan in 11111111111132424

The chapter length has been short, Arthur is like a Gary Stu Malfoy felt OOC, and the OCs lack any contribution towards the story, but I think what your strengths are the OCs themselves, Iris feels like a great mentor and her feud with Dumbledore and Lily can be expanded on and while Elias may feel like a Ron, he is different in the way that he would be what you would expect from a side character that actually helps and contributes, sort of like Hermione but without the annoying traits, the mystery, suspense, and world-building, now I know Harry Potter is an already established world but your focus on the story of Arthur and the consequences of the actions of the previous generation we find out gradually, is impeccable. Let me know what type of Author you want to be and what your goals are, I might be able to help. I have deep knowledge regarding tropes.