Ok here's my two cents h quality of writing and grammar is good, but there's something I am not satisfied, and that is just suddenly dropping the information traits and details in an unattractive way, i think it can be improved more how it was delivered. The story is engaging as I wonder how the story will go. Overall it's good. Keep up the good work, you can do it fellows!
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