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Review Detail of Jolan_Hildebrandt in If And Maybe

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This book shows promise but why do you hesitate to name characters? I had no idea who was talking to who in the first chapter. Also you might want to check over your paragraphs and slim them down.

If And Maybe

Kay Lillyt

Liked it!

me gusta

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Thank you.