This really does seem like an interesting story but I find it just difficult to read it when it looks like a script for a play. If not for that I would've given it 5 stars.
Hey, man thanks for reviewing my book. Thanks for pointing out the things you don't like. I have rectified the way I write in my premium chapters and if you wanna read another one of my stories it's name is White Jack. That is written in a way that would be easy for you to read