Review Detail of WinterTimeCrime in Uncontrollable Desire(discontinued)

This was very fun to read! I can tell the author's writing style and dialogue are highly influenced by manga and anime. It's important to note, that a lot of the readers on this site read from their phones and tablets. That being said, make sure to space out dialogue as well as keep paragraphs up to 2-3 lines long. It was hard for me to continue reading at times due to the congested passages and conversations. Don't forget to go back and revise your work as I found your work lacking in grammar, diction, and sentence structure. Grammarly is an all-in-one option if you don't feel like doing it yourself (or you're lazy like me). Anyways, awesome story and a lot of potentials, can't wait to read more.