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Review Detail of Layios in A Fated Day

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Layios
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This review is wrote after I finished the 1st volume so when he travel to the 2nd world. To begin the start may has been forced for some or all right for other , as for me ti was the latter. I didn't find anything weird and the "NTR" that his mother got few years ago between his father and a woman didn't really bother me and I think it helped MC having mother and sister closer to him 'cause only male in his family u know. Now about the 1st world, I will say it is cliche but well normal I think still my problem about his first world was boring yup 'cause I already knew the event ahead same about MC but sometimes he seem to forget about it ( he's dumb? He got a photography memory something like that , unlike edi-thing memory but still he should have a good memory ). I thought maybe author will make some change *-* maybe it will be different ! I was excited and quickly became a deflated balloon when I read the action MC took. Nearly, NEARLY everything was the same as the original protagonist, the action, the route and his action of helping Shea and Yue or training her clan , same way about Yue scratched and Shea tagging along. The only thing that changed was Yue+MC did R-18 and Hajime ran away like a ** after he got the chance to leave the labyrinth. Anyways big disappointment and in my opinion it was like a copy paste with r-18 content and just changing MC look and mind. World background 🌟🌟🌟 in the end the third was added 'cause of mystery and his mysterious background well a bit cliche (for me) his identity we've got already some clue so not really fun. Characters design 🌟🌟🌟 average that's the only word I can use to describe him and his family. They does not seem special nor bad. Writing quality 🌟🌟🌟 average like mine and maybe only good point is Update stability with 🌟🌟🌟🌟 To conclude, I will continue and try to be optimistic about future content and author development. I hope author will get better ,this is also my wish because I find this novel has good idea just miss good development from author.

A Fated Day

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I honestly didn’t mean for it to look like I copy and pasted it. I just wrote what I remembered from Arifureta. And yes, I agree that it seems like all the routes/actions were copied. At that time, I didn’t really put that much effort in thinking about ‘how to make my work good’ and all of that because of irl stuff. That’s my failure as a writer. I should have made sure to check whether my work was too similar to the novel/anime before uploading it. And to be honest, the Arifureta arc wasn’t that good. As for the other bad qualities, it’s the same reason as above. Yes, I am trying to read more books, so that I know how to better develope my character and world. But that takes time to improve. Up to the Family arc, I can’t really say that it improved a lot. But I can assure you that the Family arc will be more enjoyable. As I been told about the problem above by other people, and I am trying to improve on that. As for his identity, all I can say is that it isn’t simple as we all think. Tell me things that I haven’t mention in this response as wel as if you want me to respond to it. Putting that all aside, thank you for leaving this review. 😊

Layios
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Np I just wrote this review to comment my thoughts about the 1st volume of this novel ^^ Wish you good luck being a writer 'cause I know it's hard.

Lunare:I honestly didn’t mean for it to look like I copy and pasted it. I just wrote what I remembered from Arifureta. And yes, I agree that it seems like all the routes/actions were copied. At that time, I didn’t really put that much effort in thinking about ‘how to make my work good’ and all of that because of irl stuff. That’s my failure as a writer. I should have made sure to check whether my work was too similar to the novel/anime before uploading it. And to be honest, the Arifureta arc wasn’t that good. As for the other bad qualities, it’s the same reason as above. Yes, I am trying to read more books, so that I know how to better develope my character and world. But that takes time to improve. Up to the Family arc, I can’t really say that it improved a lot. But I can assure you that the Family arc will be more enjoyable. As I been told about the problem above by other people, and I am trying to improve on that. As for his identity, all I can say is that it isn’t simple as we all think. Tell me things that I haven’t mention in this response as wel as if you want me to respond to it. Putting that all aside, thank you for leaving this review. 😊