The story itself is fine, however, I've come across multiple grammatical mistakes. The dialogue tags needs more work as well as the descriptions to create more in-depth connection to the reader. There are at times where punctuations are lacking. I've come across in chapter 2 where the dialogue is in all caps, I don't know whether they were shouting or just a distinction from the narration. Despite this, the story flow is nice and has some plot advancement in the first few parts. Keep up the good work.
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