Decent Enough storyline but i think you should re write the ninja stuff out keep the Ki theres really no link there and it seemed you Were reaching so u could have cool ninja powers. I also think you should go back through and do another read through A lot of the sentances are confusing making it a hard read otherwise awesome
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