The idea for the story is fun and interesting and I really wanted to enjoy it but every time I start to get interested there is pages of descriptions about stuff I don't care about and that are completely uneccessary. Please think about what you would want to read, would you take the time to read three pages about architecture? Details should mostly be peppered in carefully and only when neccessary. The best way is if two people are talking. Worldbuilding is important but extra details like the design of each floor of the building are just not needed.
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