Review Detail of VateRise in Overturning Fate (~A Journey of a Lifetime~)
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Right. Not that many mistakes, and I can see you are editing stuff. This is good, but I still suggest that you pay attention to word "seems". You used it a lot in the beginning chapters. As for the story? Yea I assume he is or will be OP. Not that I would give you bad review due to that, but it is overused. Especially the system stuff. I personally would prefer if he fared for himself without that system. Now he will have everything handed to him. Story has potential, if the author makes it unique. Besides that, yea give it a try if you are into system stuff.
Overturning Fate (~A Journey of a Lifetime~)
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Thanks for the review and comment. I'm rewriting this novel after I feel I've wasted this novel potential by using system. You're right about me using seems and that a tad too much. Also, I'm making the character too op fast because he managed to kill a lv 17 bird when he was literally lv 2. Although I can a tribute it that the falcon growth was variant and headed more towards VIT + it was a juvenile and have no battle experience. But still, I'm making him too op that sooner or later I will hit a writer block. So I've asked for a suggestion to you in the comments one one of my chapter about where is the direction my novel should go. 1. He died and reincarnate as a monkey amongst the monkey tribe 2. He transmigated/summoned and have a monkey bloodline. Thanks for any suggestion 😂👍👍
My suggestion is: don't go with the system. Just make him adapt naturaly. As for any bloodlines, I'd leave that for future chapters, not for beginning. Where you reincarnare him is up to you. Optionally, you can abandon the whole reincarnation stuff, and start from the point where he would reincarnate, just without that concept. It will be less generic and more unique.
ExodusGaming555:Thanks for the review and comment. I'm rewriting this novel after I feel I've wasted this novel potential by using system. You're right about me using seems and that a tad too much. Also, I'm making the character too op fast because he managed to kill a lv 17 bird when he was literally lv 2. Although I can a tribute it that the falcon growth was variant and headed more towards VIT + it was a juvenile and have no battle experience. But still, I'm making him too op that sooner or later I will hit a writer block. So I've asked for a suggestion to you in the comments one one of my chapter about where is the direction my novel should go. 1. He died and reincarnate as a monkey amongst the monkey tribe 2. He transmigated/summoned and have a monkey bloodline. Thanks for any suggestion 😂👍👍
Do what will be the best according to you the 1st option where he reincarnates as a monkey or 2nd option where he trans migrate/summoned with a monkey bloodline?
VateRise:My suggestion is: don't go with the system. Just make him adapt naturaly. As for any bloodlines, I'd leave that for future chapters, not for beginning. Where you reincarnare him is up to you. Optionally, you can abandon the whole reincarnation stuff, and start from the point where he would reincarnate, just without that concept. It will be less generic and more unique.