Review Detail of anon88 in The Abandoned One

This is a review of the first two chapters. The story centers on Guinevere an immature little sister who thinks the world revolves around her. The heroine found out that her parents have arranged a marriage for her so she: 1) blames her older brother for not taking her place and 2) falls in love with a stranger she meets. Guinevere’s bratty behavior makes the reader question how she was raised especially after “meeting “ her brother. Guinevere’s brother response to his sister’s pain can be summarized as “so what?!” “I am in love!” “Praise me!” The female lead and her family are unlike able. The construction of the story is better than the content. The author is adept at transitioning between scenes. The separation between dialogue and description is clear. There are a few issues of verbs having the wrong tense. The author is good, so I hope the characters will become more like able.