The ideas are there, but the execution needs some polish. Particularly, the grammar. I don't want to sound like a grammar Nazi or anything, but sufficiently good grammar can contribute immensely to the reading experience and help your novel get some more attention. I suggest getting someone to proof read for you. But you're doing great so far. Keep at it. Great job girl.
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