Item: Mother Of All Systems!!
Rating: 1

InfernalRhageLv46yr

2018-10-25 21:42

Honestly I am not impressed with this novel for a number of reasons the main one being the the writing quality. The number of times the author starts a sentence without capitalizing is enough to drive anyone crazy. Then when you add in the misuse of pronouns such as his her he and she it becomes a mess. The author also needs to keep track of his math better stating he was awarded 5000sp for a quest and only showing 1000 on the stats page without any store purchases then jumping from 1000 to 8000 with no notice that he gained anything. Another example is where the system suggests he purchase an upgrade for 150sp for him to state he doesn't have enough and to notify him when he did. In that same chapter it shows him having 8000sp which is more than enough to cover a 150sp purchase. I highly suggest the author find an editor for this novel to help him fix said errors before continuing.

Mother Of All Systems!!

Crixzivion

4.2

46 Chs

Liked by 2 people

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CrixzivionAuthor

Hahaha thanks i will keep note for it! I actually see some errors when i reread it! I will improve my writing in the future as this is only a practice novel!

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hey author i really have something to tell you I WANT MOREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

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