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Boring plot and rushed bad endings. It wasn't my cup of tea, but maybe, you'll like it!? The story is a little too rushed. The beggining is very fun, but it seems like the author got tired of it and killed the antagonists like they were random cannon fodders, and solved most of the MC problems without any excitement. Then she did the same with the entire arc, simply giving it a big time skip and really unfufilling resolution. (which is a spoiler) The second Phoenix Arc was even more stale with very little adventure or exciting events. Then, an even more unfufilling resolution than the first comes in the end, accompanied by several giant time skips as well. It's like the author is just masochist or writing an story for people with bad endings fetish. So, after seeing all the parts that would be fun be skipped and then watch two really rushed and bad endings, I dropped it.
Quick Transmigration: The Villain Saving System
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Should I put a warning that I'm a reader and author whose favorite plot device is character death? Haha. Anyways, thanks a lot for the feedback. Actually you pointed out a lot of things that I personally also felt were issues myself. So I'm trying to improve it in my zombie apocalypse arc, though I still tend to use a lot of time skips.
Sure. My advice is for you to explore your characters more, especially the antagonists. Second, character deaths or unhappy endings are ok, as long as there was a reason and meaning behind them, like the MC making a mistake and growing from it. The endings is bad when it's unfair, cheap and betrays the rest of the plot you constructed. Like the phoenix arc, she did everything right, but at the end she got screwed for nothing in a really unreasonable way. It would be far more interesting if she, for example, met the protagonist outside, had a battle and lost, and the protagonist would blame herself for not focusing on cultivation all those years and be more ruthless in the next scenario. (which should already have happened in first scenario, but it seems the MC thinks dying because she's weak is normal) If you want inspiration, read 'My Disciple Died Yet Again'. The Mc deaths are used in a funny way and she grows from each of them.
Yeah, I've already read My Disciple, it's one of my fav novels haha. I do agree with you, actually, a lot of those deaths were partially unintentional (of them, Long Aotian's death was semi-planned, the other two lead's just kinda died off because there was opportunity and I was just unsure how to keep them). As for the MC's death, I had always intended for her to die, though the way she died was not what I had initially planned (well, my initial plans never included the dragon phoenix arc in the first place, so most of that was all me kind of meandering and trying to figure out where I wanted to take it - once I killed off one person, it just kinda snowballed and I was like welp y'all all dead now). In the end, you are right that I just got tired of the arc and wanted to rush the ending lol XD a little embarrassing that you saw right through me hahaha. If I go back to edit, I will probably expand on that arc, since it was the result of me just feeling really impatient for the next arc.
hawlol:Sure. My advice is for you to explore your characters more, especially the antagonists. Second, character deaths or unhappy endings are ok, as long as there was a reason and meaning behind them, like the MC making a mistake and growing from it. The endings is bad when it's unfair, cheap and betrays the rest of the plot you constructed. Like the phoenix arc, she did everything right, but at the end she got screwed for nothing in a really unreasonable way. It would be far more interesting if she, for example, met the protagonist outside, had a battle and lost, and the protagonist would blame herself for not focusing on cultivation all those years and be more ruthless in the next scenario. (which should already have happened in first scenario, but it seems the MC thinks dying because she's weak is normal) If you want inspiration, read 'My Disciple Died Yet Again'. The Mc deaths are used in a funny way and she grows from each of them.
