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Hm... let see what to say. Well, forget it long story short, I enjoy reading in my free time. So if you have any book recommendations, not only including light novels send them my way.
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Juto42minComentado porCh 24 Two Rooms Two Different Outcums! - Part 3- Juto2hrespondió a Writersblockills
- Juto2hrespondió a Mohammed_Jawad
Ah okay, that makes more sense now! Considering that factor makes for this chapter would make it less irritating, but I still believe the main character should be a bit more cautious in a new environment. It would be great if some things were explained in more detail, but hey, I get it, it's all about the plot! At first, I was a bit thrown off by the character's behavior considering his knowledge of Marvel and DC, but if it's only partial knowledge, then it's more understandable. By the way, sorry about my previous message, I was just a bit upset at the time. Overall, I really enjoyed the story and the character growth in the previous chapters, this one just caught me off guard.
Ch 7 Chapter 7 - Juto3hrespondió a Anonny_Anonymous
Dr. Strange is not present, and the character awakens afraid and loses control of his powers, fleeing to a secluded area. It is unclear how others would have knowledge of his past unless surveillance equipment was deployed. The logic and acceptance of the situation by the main character are questionable, as the sudden revelation of being watched is easily accepted without much resistance. The character's state of mind is a factor, but awareness of being in a Marvel universe should prompt more caution.
Ch 7 Chapter 7 - Juto4hrespondió a Nobume_Imai_5090
nice was going to ask myself
"Kade, good timing!" Iron Man called out, blasting a villain with a repulsor beam. "We've got to defuse these bombs and deal with these guys at the same time." - Juto4hComentado porCh 29 29. Full Shikai, Demon Sword Muramasa!
- Juto5hComentado porCh 15 15-fun and kicked out of the club
- Juto5hrespondió a Darth_Nihilus_6756
she only cut off one plus who I this day and age does not jave a cell phone even if they are criminals as long as it not damage and they value there life enough to gather enough will power to call the police. the again at the speed the blood would come out that would jave to be their first thought and actions plus maybe using their belt to tie there leg to stop or slow the bleeding if there enough left for any grip space. sadly if it the arm I do not know.what to say especially since there in hell kitchen no one will stop by to help
"But those 3 idiots still died from bleeding? It wasn't me who killed them, who told them not to go to the hospital" - Juto5hComentado por
or this
"I could create any outfit, but end this powee girl's sexy uniform,.... I really became a bitch so easily" Isabella - Juto5hComentado por
this maybe
"I could create any outfit, but end this powee girl's sexy uniform,.... I really became a bitch so easily" Isabella - Juto6hComentado porCh 16 Chapter 16
- Juto6hComentado por
it not too late it only chapter 16 so change it if you want just leave a not in the previous chapter comments or author notes for new readers. I hope you do not change the other characters names that you mentioned so far though as the main character name is easy to replace as it in constant use but if you change side characters name that not use as often they can easily be forgotten or confused
There was a brief pause as if she hadn't expected such a response before Eun Ha voice came again, "Oh, right. Sorry about that, sweetie. I'll wait for you outside." - Juto9hComentado porCh 17 Chapter 15 - Carnal Desire 18+
- Juto9hrespondió a Rellik_Snoe
true but if the Mc was weak enough that would be a good bargain
"Derek and that kid are smart, they won't be out tonight" Kate stated with boredom in her tone, "And if for some reason he and his brother are out there, we take down Derek but not the kid, he saved Allison's life at the school, i'd like to payback a life debt if possible" Chris said with finality and marked the map for where they could set up ambushes for the alpha. - Juto13hComentado por
I would have waited until you left the hospital now so many people going to notice her change
'female werekin personality changes are on a whole other level' i thought to myself and continued with the history lesson and information sharing, the Erica in front of me was so much more beautiful and dare i say sexier than how she was before, her complexion looked better, she wasn't as pale as she was before, her curves and assets were more softer and perfect, her body got toned, like she was a gym girl, she also got a bit taller, her legs were more perfectly sculpted, her skin was smoother to the touch and her face was so much more beautiful, she looked like a vogue supermodel. - Juto13hrespondió a ScarletQC
Yeah some medicine that covered by insurance you still need to pay over $500.00 you would think the prices would decrease overtime as technology increases but no medicine prices are getting more and more crazy
"Ah! Erica, well it's good she has a friend to check on her, she's been feeling abit lonely, her foster parents haven't even come in to check on her and her medical bills aren't being paid for anymore, poor girl" she said worriedly, "Is that so?? Here use this to pay for all her fees Mrs. McCall" i remarked and gave her my bank card, "Wha-huh? Your paying for Erica's outstanding fees? You do know it's over a hundred thousand dollars yes?" she asked looking bewildered, "Yes i figured as much, it's fine, just pay for it with my insurance and card please" i stated calmly. - Juto15hrespondió a Ezzy_E
I think he is slightly different from Scott as he said he was born a true alpha while Scott only awakened to be one. Plus he said he had not problems killing which indicates he might have already killed in this world. So I am not sure I doubt it should effect him but I could be wrong
Peter's alpha scent, it was different, hungry, violent, hateful and filled with rage, not like his old scent, no this scent had bloodlust to it, Jacob could feel himself getting angry, could feel he was losing his calm and rage was creeping in, he sat down on the curb and took deep breaths to calm himself down, 'Not yet, keep it cool, it's not yet time, just gotta be patient, after Kate arrives i'll rip them both apart for what they did." Jacob thought as he calmed down, after a couple minutes and he could sniff Peter's scent getting weaker which meant he had already passed through the woods nearby and left, Jacob got up and headed for his apartment to get ready for school. - Juto1drespondió a Ques21
Thanks it is good to have something to go off of then let my mind edit the rest as I read.
Sarah Maheani (Zeta werewolf - Dusk Pack member - Alphas Soul mate - Second Luna)