Riven_Ansen

This is a good story overall, but it has a serious problem with it's pacing. The author is constantly blitzing through every scene to get to the next one, and for some stories this would be fine; not wasting time on unimportant things to get to the meat of the stort isn't inherently wrong. But for what is supposed to be a romance story chiefly it is a horrible practice. Just glossing over the growth of the relationship of two character in less than a single chapter makes it hard to take anything in this story seriously.

While this is a surprisingly well written story, in its current state it's one step removed from being unreadable. I understand that english is not the authors main language, but the grammar within this work is, quite frankly, egregious.