MrBan

One more poorly written chap and I'm bailing. Sad is the author seems to have a workable novel idea but the awful writing is just a bit roadblock to reader interest. Was wondering about the low views given the high number of chaps as of Jun 2026. Now I see why. I think the author should have rewritten the earlier chaps.

The writing so far feels like someone is chasing the author with chainsaw. He has to write in shorts Burt's as he dodged every saw swing and that is translating into illogically sequenced scenes as every thing is rushed.

As of jun 9 2026, chapters 99 onwards are all exactly the same lmao.

ah so that's why

This was a fun chap

see she did not waste time..Learn from her, Javier

I love this one more though. Liana best girl in any novel for me forever

God I love her