Anonymus_Nighter

Not the MC being NTRed, so I don't think it's a problem.

Hm, it's entirely up to you. It was just friendly advice.

You could've explained his personality before to not make readers feel otherwise. It would've helped a lot.

He did wait. The butter wasn't supposed to turn back, and the door had almost closed off. The butler couldn't see it clearly, he wasn't even sure if he saw the right thing. So, there was no need for Alex to be worried.

Wouldn't the kids not telling their parents about whatever they had seen be more suspicious??? Wouldn't it make people surer about Alex's ability being very strong? Only those who have something to hide would do such thing, so instead of pushing the trouble away, the oath from the children would pull more trouble to them.

I would say, start a new story. The premise of the story can be same, but better. You won't feel bored while doing it, and you could feel the thrill of starting a new book again as well. Though that's just an advice from one author to another.

I get it, but still... Also, the transition from his fatherly love to something else was also way to fast. You could've given him some time to think about it, but well, it would still do good on WN.

I read some chapters ahead, and you really need to edit that part. It got really confusing. Honestly, this book would do way better if you had good grammar, and showed more feelings in your characters. I'll come back to read it again when its fixed, bcs as an author myself, I just can't see a work going to waste like this. Again, please fix those two things and your boom will reach it's deserving position. Thank you.

Too long detailed speech from the system, and the MC's reaction wasn't show much. He even seemed to accept it very soon.

Yo, Author. I can't tell when the speech is starting. Or more like, I can tell, but it's confusion... I would suggest you use double inverted commas for speech, even if it's first POV.