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The saying is a person doesn’t know when to keep their mouth shut. Then again, néw phrases come out all the time.

The story’s plot and character development, while at times a bit frustrating, was solid for the first 109 chapters. Pronoun confusion was annoying, but in the whole didn’t cause much confusion. Unfortunately, the final third of the book felt like a “Choose Your Own Adventure” book, with whole sections repeating multiple times. It feels that it needs to be edited and revamped for a cleaner, clearer conclusion. Which is really unfortunate, as I had been enjoying it. I finally did have to skip a few chapters at the end, and honestly, don’t feel I missed anything.

Duplicate sentence

Charlotte is a little girl. I get pronouns aren’t stable in this book/translation, but it’s really frustrating to read.

Vision and eyesight are not interchangeable in this context.

Stethoscope = telescope One is to hear things, the other to see things

Marissa = Talisa

No, it should be later/earlier, as when Michael got there, she also looked at the clock and it was 2 am…

Not Michael - Darius

Talisa is a she