It is turning out to be a great story and can't wait to read more but I do think that in the beginning the story went a bit fast and also the fact he trusted that lady way to fast as just a day before he lost his dad and mother. It would of also have been cool if the MC Esu saw his parents get killed by the *Captain of the invaders* and Esu would remember his face and get revenge. But apart from that the story is great good job (Also You should add him paying taxes (ps. This is taxman butch. Pay your taxes)