Christian_Lynch

so why make her like this

so this gonna be a short one which will end in a few months also one more question to plan to ever pick back up extra descent or is that just gone completely cuz i liked it

also i didn't mean ur work was bad when i said all of that the reason i aint talk much about the character writing and such is bcuz there great my only problem was the romance and ASTRID(i despise her from the depths of my soul) every character trait u have given her is shitty EXCEPT her being an aspiring doctor thats cool but the stalker part is horrible and calling erza a commoner is just not funny

bro what am i supposed to notice that he knows they like bro WE HAVE NO PICTURES TO SEE HIS FACE all we can do is use the words to understand so how am i supposed to know this info without u telling me but i get what u mean when u say am too fixated on romamce i love action with a decent amount of romance thats why i kinda wish for a good romance if u gonna add the romance genre also 1 author is this gonna be a long novel like 1000 or 2000 chapters long or like 200-600 long

i feel like this is a bad thing cuz for a long term character u cant really use damiens past cuz it has nothing meaningfull in it

cringy ahh line

its decent but u can tell it was written by an amateur the first 10 chapters were ok but his family felt inhumane in a way ur son just woke up from a hospital and u just left.... and u could tell it copied from tapov and the dream he had about the future was like tapov too and felt misplaced if u are tryna build suspense and act mysterious dont give so much info in one dream in the first 20 chapters the fights were insanely fast but in the physical assesment they were long ash and boring i guess every character seems so fake like ren he got close to the mc so fast its insane add some realism to these interactions also it has so much useless monolouge it completely ruins any fight that gets u excited

honestly is a reason to drop it i think its way to early to be giving out this much information u could have built suspense with all this and also this entire novel so far just seems like a tapov copy u made little changes to hide the inspiration

bro tapop monarchs indifference made ren badass but this feels so edgy

the plot is altered tho so at this point just lead the story and become the other mcs sugar daddy