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proof of Gods absence?? which one is this ?
i can't say you are perfect there are some flaws but nothing more, story is good but I think you don't have a clear picture in mind, I can't say anything about your MC because let's be real he doesn't have many lines and relationships with other feels out of place ( i guess because he transmigrated Directly 15 years, after and didn't have any control ) and the things you mentioned like grammer and short chapters it's not a big issue people make mistakes and it's okay and i would have a short chapters then just info dumps or too much fluf, story is over all good but I think you can build more of his personality.
whats the name ?
i think there is cultural differences between us or just how we perceive world, I can understand there may well be parents that will let there kids d8e on the road or steal from them, but there are also parents that will give everything for there children. without asking anything in return
hey maybe you should do something like, Adam fall after what his son did and he goes into like deep hatred towards himself or people around him and Lucifer is punishing him, but not really maybe like a good bonding moment between two
i don't know how your parents are treating you, but I will give them that house in heart beat ( my parents )