DemonKingAkuma
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No wonder I didn't get any result... Thanks for the compliment thought. I would love to continue the series, but as I said, I realized that I had been a do***it writer and I wanted to redo my writing of this series.
I see... thank you for pointing that out because I didn’t see it that way when I first wrote it. For the most part, when I wrote his initial conversations and interactions with her, I wanted to show how my protagonist kept hesitating during the Orientation obstacle course. He kept bragging about how he would get through the trials in front of him but got halted and hesitated when he saw how ridiculous some of the trials were. So, she had to step in every time and "encourage" him, so to speak. But, either way, thanks for the feedback. I'll try to avoid that in my future writing.
Thanks for the review and for reading my novel so far :) Though I'm sorry that the 'harem' aspect of my novel isn't for you... T_T But I agree with your other sentiment about how my MC's Idol Producer Job took a long time to establish anything in the novel. The introduction "arc" of this novel took a really long time to actually show my MC's capabilities and focused more on fleshing out the worldbuilding and establishing his motivation. For the most part, this arc's climax would finally be the time where he would use his abilities to the limit. Again, thank you very much for taking the time to read my novel.
Author here. These are just markers to separate the story telling sections. I attempted to manipulate the spacing between them in the editor, but the system didn't quite understand what I was trying to do. So, this is the alternative.