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you don't need to apologize, it's just my opinion, others will find it good and others won't, but if you can allow me to suggest an idea to you, given that you are not yet advanced, I think that you are giving him a character development, of course far from his current personality, because I find him to be a true cut of Deku but more optimistic, if you see what I mean there is also the problem of dialogue which are sometimes very kissable, you the fact that the MC reveals all his secrets

chapter is so cringe-inducing

Stupid isn't really an insult, yes, but it's not the kind of extreme insult, and what's more, if someone calls you stupid doesn't mean they feel insecure and all that stuff and he really wanted to insult you he would have called you an idiot and not stupid.... as for the fact that he exaggerates his first I don't agree, because my majority who put 5☆ like the harem, then there is the difference of point of view because it depends on the way in which the mc approached the characters and also the character of the mc also if he is too pouty and naive we would certainly think that he is being manipulated by other

I agree with you but it's because I hate the harem tag with all my being

Frankly author since when Naruto is a children's series

the dialogues are rubbish, it's bland and it's without emotion, you just wrote the dialogues without describing the emotions behind them, like the shock and everything, if you know what I mean.

Really??

okay, you're right, plus if I have to be honest with you I didn't read even 5 chapters and I hated it because I knew how it was going to go and, I think it was was about a year and a half ago, I came across him again in the no-harem category which led me to see the reviews and respond to your comment

here is the Chinese site if you want to read there directly plus it's much better with an automatic translation of chrome than the work done by others (be careful I'm not denigrating the work of others eh) it's just my point of view in addition there are plenty of Douluo fanfiction that you will find with a mediocre translation from MTL. You can find other Dounghwa fanfic (dsl I forget how it is spelled) if you are interested. anyway here is the link : https://m.xiaoshuo.qq.com/detail/1031826280

In English : Douluo first sword.....Author: Liu_Shui_Wu_Qing_FD...... In Chinese: 斗罗第一剑......作者：刘_水_吴_清_FD