Sentigosedge

did not read this chapter personally as a reader i dont really care about the mcs life

Running out of patients when he's likely been ripping so called abandoned ones off for years I love how author portrayed the devil. Quite accurate this guy has all time in the world trust me.

just suggestion to make the stuff more vague and less obvious. I infered that this might be hell and that devil was lying

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first chapter gives us a full explanation of ohr mc hopefully the rest of the story can deliver

It's a good example of how to develop a system novel. The writer did a good job with opening and throughing the mc right into the action but also adding meaning to it. The way the world was explained was logical and made sense, and it wasn't overwhelming it was simple and to the point. Great story overall and ill be adding it to my library's

Good story so far. I feel like the free readers deserved to see zombie apocalypse earlier or something. As thats mabye main reason people read the book but its still good anyway

can we get mc that actually uses his brain isnt he like 16???? just make mc play smart or something. Or um tell him fake name and class why do all mcs have to be like this

shes 18 dam

So here again instead of this say, "As they got closer the woman made a disgusted expression and covered her nose with her remaining hand." but again, I aint no writer either so you can maybe ask a better writer for there opinion on this, but I do this this is a show and not tell situation.