TheWriter117

Hmm Ethan Hunt, Jack Reacher vibes? I dunno because I don't see Ethan intimidating almost everyone in the story and acting like he's bigger and superior to everyone. Him and Monica having no chemistry is intentional because Ethan is keeping his distance. I do agree it's a little sterile and lacking emotion in some areas of the story but then again so both the source materials in play. Ethan Hunt himself doesn't get too connected and too open to almost everyone, only that he earn their affections, loyalty, and respect through his actions. He is a bit of a cypher after all. I also agree there's a lack of tension and creativity in the action scenes however this is simply because Ethan is just too OP to be in the Romero/Russo verse. Someone like Ethan is just too skilled and too capable in a verse where it relied on normal people and incompetent people with a lack of resource and willpower to generate scares and tension. This will change eventually in the future where Ethan will be given more desperate situations

Just Ethan's overall charm really, almost every women he meets are attracted to him in the films so this is implented in the fanfic and yes this is just the next day.

In the previous chapter, it's established that Ethan is light fingered and there's a gadget in Mission: Impossible, specifically in the third movie that lets people people go unconscious. Basically Ethan puts a sticker on CJ that makes him unconscious. As for when Ethan put it, it's when CJ got close to Ethan

It's mandatory lol

Obviously it's a tight ride lol

I'm just not all convinced with the character daydreaming of her rival crush while she's trying to beat him in court which just took me off. Instead of that, for me, maybe it's just better to just set up their ideology and morality first and explore it deeply why they are rivals and against each other then set up their romantic interest with one another later because this actually makes them look like real professionals that I can get behind.

Although the prose is solid, the way it is structured is overwhelming and counter-intuitive, the narrative is what really stands out and doesn't waste time setting up the plot and characters along with its world. The concept itself as a whole may not be unique but it still tries hard to distinguish itself from other works in the supernatural genre. Overall, this is an ambitious story that is rough around the edges but worthy enough to give it a try.

I tried hard not to give them too much descriptions and I wanted the audience to have some imagination on what they look. For example, the story is set in the 70s and when you say Biker, your mind will conjure up that image of that 70s bikers you see on TV or the internet. As for the description of the surrounding, well it's a diner and it has some people in it which the story implicates but doesn't go much into detail what it actually looks like but simply leaves it up to the imagination of the readers

With a gripping prologue, this story makes it way to get to the interesting parts although I dislike the story's emphasis on romance instead of delving deeply hard into characters' morality and ideology because that would be more thematically rich and complex. But that's just me. There are some pacing issues here and there but these are tolerable when the characters are so interesting to read. However despite my gripes with this one, Innocent Until Proven Guilty is a solid work that I would recommend.

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